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Hey, my names is Jake Relcast but most of my friends call me Pyro on the case that I have this power where I can control...well fire. It happened About a year ago in Manhattan, NY. Some terrorists got the smart idea to drop a bomb on our little island. It was a pretty well designed bomb it completely incinerated an entire 5 city blocks killing anything it made contact with including my parents, Fortunately my brother was in Chicago at the time, I wasn't that lucky. I was with my parents that day but for some reason I survived, Unconscious and naked but alive. some aftermath scavengers found me and quickly but me on medical machines in the nearest non destroyed hospital. When I woke up, a few weeks later, I spazzed out and completely caught aflame burning all of the machines and medical supplies. After i came to my senses i threw on what little clothes the scavengers brought for me and returned to the streets. It was hetic, Chaos...not a cop in sight and people all living on the streets in most cases. As I walked through the streets I could hear faded screams and shouts in the distance. Instinct told me to avoid it. My Heart told me to chase it. When i got to the source of the Screams I saw a single woman about 19, a year younger than me trying to defend her self against a bunch of rapists. I ran up and punched one in the face and kicked another in the groin...just when i thought we were safe a baseball bat cracked over my head. In most cases a person hit with a baseball bat would be knocked unconscious, but i figured out that night that I was far from normal, I turned around and laughed, laughed can you believe it, at the man who hit me with the bat. then i lifted my fist from my side and clenched it, it burst into flames and gave the man a slug to the stomach most likely killing him. I looked at the two I hit eariler...they just ran away. Then I turned to the girl. This is how I met my first friend after the incident....this was how i discovered i wasn't normal, but gifted....

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Chapter 3

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can some one like....idk read this please

Sorry my bro was on the computer until like, 10 minutes ago ^-^;

Anyway... I liked chapter two :-) You're not bad.

Something I want to point out though (sorry -,-) When dialogue is used in a story, you generally make that into a new paragraph... like so... (sorry if this is annoying -,-)

"Hey there generic hobag number 1!" Exclaimed generic pimpguy number 1.

Generic hobag number 1 looked at generic pimpguy number 1 and said, "Oh hey what's up?"

haha yea i know, i read quite often, i was just lazy and typing fast before i let my brother on the computer.

Haha, alright then :3 I get finicky about that stuff.

I'm surpised you didn't point out any other errors i made. such as the "I then shot flames from(out of my hands) letting me sly or hover" the parentheses is what is missing in the actual story

Well i guess if I look at it now... haha whoops ^^;

Sounds good, much better than anything I could write of a story. I usually get bored and stop after a paragraph or so ^_^'
But you should run a spell check over it and check some of your capitalization.

Updated with Chapter 3